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Post by CrazyDave on Mar 28, 2005 23:06:02 GMT -5
Ok, since everyone else did, I did too!
Well, please review if you can!
Id love to have some REAL advice on this story, because from my xanga, I've gotten.... Nothing.
So, PLEASE!!!! HELP ME!!!!
be honest and mean, its fine! I can take it! Mostly!
R & R!!! (Read and Review)!!!
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Post by CrazyDave on Mar 29, 2005 16:17:15 GMT -5
Nobody said anything yet...
God DAMN IT!!!!!!
anyway, chapter 4 is up.....
huh.... I don't know why I try.....
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Post by RubberPiggy on Mar 29, 2005 17:23:41 GMT -5
I HAVE READ IT!
And damn, Asteroc as grown up, but he's still hilarious as ever. I love it. Everything he does and says I can just see in my head as an anime character, which must be good, because his character is so developed and whatnot. Yeah, that makes sense...
I love the tone that you write in. It has this Trigun-like silly-yet-serious anime tone to it. Everytime Erika said "FLAME!" I started giggling, and I absolutely loved Asteroc pushing her into the water. It was amazing. I love their arguing.
I'm loving seeing more and more sides to Asteroc's character. I can't wait to discover his true motives.
The only thing that annoys me is the lack of characterization with Risa. I understand that you probably did that to be mysterious, to keep the reader wondering about what is up with her. But IMO, it just comes off as annoying moreso than mysterious. Completely unlike Asteroc.
Oh, and the oddly capitalized words. That annoyed me. But if that has significance, then that's okay.
Overall, good job. Me likey!
Ieee, that took too long. Caitlyn's story will have to wait till tomorrow....
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on Mar 30, 2005 18:37:18 GMT -5
Chapter..... uh..... five is up?
yeah, five, I'm right.
(Stolen from Sara)And please, if you read the chapter, post some kind of responce. Or else I'm gonna worry my head off that you didn't read it because you hate it and you hate me. Thank you.
Really. I will worry my head off. And maybe feel stupid and alone, cry into my pillow, get really drunk, and have crazy, unprotected sex with a Grapefruit.
Or.... you could review.
Either one's good....
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Post by RubberPiggy on Mar 31, 2005 6:23:32 GMT -5
Whee, loved it!
"It's better than being blown up, that's for sure."
OMG, LOL!!!!!!!!!! I giggled for a good five minutes straight. I love it!
Very good, funny chapter. As I've said before, I love the anime vibe. Astaroc reminds me so often of Vash the Stampede. Have you ever seen Trigun? Good show...
But anyway, yeah. Great fun. Can't wait to see the next chapter!
~RP~
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Post by RubberPiggy on Mar 31, 2005 18:53:09 GMT -5
Hey, I commented about your Chapter Six on your Xanga, FYI.
I <3 "All That Remains."
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on Mar 31, 2005 20:31:26 GMT -5
Chapter six is now up!
Everybody Dance NOW!!!
hee hee hee.....
Actually, this chapter may be the end of the super-fast updates of this story. While I do have the plot planned out till about Chapter 14 already, I don't write as fast as I'd like too, and my Chapters usually end up long.
So, It may be a few days before the next update. Or, it'll be up tonight.
Whatever....
PLZ!!!! R & R!!!!!!!
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Post by RubberPiggy on Mar 31, 2005 21:10:08 GMT -5
Whoo! Whenever you get it up, can't wait for chapter seven.
On an unrelated note, while I have been thinking about it, I haven't even started my chapter six yet. *gasp* I'm bad...
I <3 "All That Remains."
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on Apr 1, 2005 0:00:56 GMT -5
Well, it took about three hours, but.....
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Chapter seven is now up.
I just check this, and will anounce it every time I write a new chapter.
Words: 8,324 Pages: 33
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Post by RubberPiggy on Apr 1, 2005 6:22:11 GMT -5
Awesome. I'll read it after skool.
~RP~
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Post by RubberPiggy on Apr 1, 2005 17:53:06 GMT -5
OMG, Dave, I love this story soooooooooooo much! You're so good at this! I kept waiting and waiting and waiting till he would reveal his wings, and now... YAAAAAY! And I loved Astaroc's answer to Erika's question. In a way, it was very... Pape. Lol. But dude, I love this so much. Before I started reading it, you mentioned something about possibly having to stop writing it for some reason I didn't understand, but if you stop writing... let's just say there will be stabbing involved. >=)
"ALL THAT REMAINS" ROCKS!!!
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on Apr 2, 2005 22:20:08 GMT -5
Ok folks.... here's the deal....
I was bored today. REALLY bored. So wrote....
.....about six pages....
of All That Remains......
So....uh.... don' t think this going to happen all the time.... but....
Chapter eight is now up.
Words: 10,024 Pages: 38
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Post by RubberPiggy on Apr 2, 2005 23:50:18 GMT -5
Okay, first of all...
This is the meanest cliff-hanger yet! Ieee! How dare you!? Now I'm gonna have a heart attack from fear and... and wonderment. Yeah, that's it.
So you know, of course, another great chapter that I loved. Absolutely loved the reference to Curse-boy, Demon-lady, and Kitty-man! ;D Lol, love it! Not quite so giggle-inducing as the "better than getting blown up" line, but still very happy making.
Lol, I don't know what I can say that I haven't already said about why I love this story. It's great, Dave. You rock.
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on Apr 4, 2005 15:55:44 GMT -5
today's update!
ok, I'm trying this thing..... right.... now....
right now I'm about 30%-50% done with Chapter nine.
I'm also trying to think ahead to see the plot all the way home.....
Finally.... WINSTON!!! CAIT!!!
YOU GUYS OWE ME A GOD DAMNED REVIEW!!!
I GAVE YOU EACH ONE(at least)!!
huh..... I'll try to keep you all informed....
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Post by RubberPiggy on Apr 4, 2005 16:04:45 GMT -5
You're welcome, BTW.
Sorry, I don't mean to sound bitter... I know you're appreciative that I R&R on your story... but maybe people never review because you don't thank them for their reviews...
Or not. I bet they're just lazy.
~RP~
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