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Post by CrazyDave on May 2, 2005 14:45:49 GMT -5
Oh, HA HA. Very funny.
no really, the link is now back up, but the story feels.... very rushed....
I'm contemplating re-writing all the stuff I just wrote....
You know what I really need? a Beta reader. Someone I can send my work to early so they can check it quickly for spelling mistakes and find the weaknesses in my story.
It's kinda dumb to do this now, but is anyone willing to do that? If you are just post your email or something.
We'll see what happens after that....
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Post by RubberPiggy on May 2, 2005 15:00:45 GMT -5
I was about to volenteer, but then I realized... I love this story soooo much. You know how much I absolutely LOVE this story. It even says so in my siggy. So I'm just worried that it would ruin this love for me if I saw it before it was finished. And that would suck for both of us. So, I'm sorry, but I must decline.
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on May 2, 2005 17:02:59 GMT -5
Ah, screw it...
You'll just have to like it, screw ups and all....
which reminds me....
Pages: 63 Words: 16,394 Chapters: 13 Paragraphs: 967 Lines: 2,411 Reviews: 11; Rubberpiggy: 8, Jinx: 3
SURPRISE!!!!
PREpare for the worst cliffhanger EVER!!!!!
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Post by CrazyDave on May 2, 2005 17:44:47 GMT -5
Ok, I've actually finished it now.
It's done.
Finito.
Completed.
Done-didilly-un.
but, I'll wait a little bit to post it. (I'm going to make it my 500th entry!!!! what a milestone!)
the faster I get reviews the faster the Epilogue comes out!
hurry, hurry!
I want reviews!!!!
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Post by RubberPiggy on May 3, 2005 8:22:28 GMT -5
HOLY CRAAAAAAAAAAP!
Could it all have been an act? All that Astaroc did, all of it, not even real? Always working for the wrong side? I don't want to believe it. I'm still holding the hope that now is the time that he is acting. It has to be. I thought Astaroc was better than that. But he killed Erika's daddy! Oh, how could he do that? He couldn't... he wouldn't... I'm still hoping... WAIT! The light spell! It made a bright light, but what if it cast an ILLUSION of Astaroc killing the king! OH! It could happen! I'm hoping...
Gaaaaaaahhhh... Dave better post the next chapter soon... or I may just DIE.
Oh, I can't wait to see what happens next, dude. This is the coolest story EVER. I love it soooo.
And at five hundred posts you'll get another star! Yay for Dave!
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on May 3, 2005 12:21:09 GMT -5
well, I'll tell you something for sure.....
I'm setting the end of this one to be a lead in for the real story.
You'll see today at 4:00, cause that's when I'm posting the LAST CHAPTER!!!!!
WOOOOO!!!! yeah, it's gonna be nuts!
And, I'm putting a music link in the story, so you have the appropriate music as you read the ending...
Hee hee hee.... as for your questions.....
You'll see!
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Full Pirate Monkey
Just beyond your imagination...
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Post by Jinxie<3 on May 3, 2005 15:34:49 GMT -5
I had to bite my hand so I didn't scream.
Holy HELL...I wasn't expecting that at all. AH!
I love it, Dave. Wow...just...that was awesome. I loved how Astaroc spouted off how great he is and what all he's done for his introduction.
Maybe Sara's right...maybe it is only an illusion...
AH!
-reads on-
-Jinxie<3
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Post by CrazyDave on May 3, 2005 15:37:32 GMT -5
well, Ladies and Gentalmen, It's finally over.
Six months (on and off) Of good hard work have led up to this point, and I couldn't be happier.
There's a sence of acomplishment around me today, as I am so.... happy that my story has been told. My mind can now rest, because the story I invisioned is now upon paper.
I'd like to take this time to thank two very special people to this entire project. First, I'd like to thank Laura (a.k.a. Jinx) for all her assistance and possitive words. Reading her stories inspired me to continue my work on All That Remains, and for that, I am humbly thankful. Last, but certainly not least, I'd like to thank Sara (a.k.a. Rubberpiggy) for all her slightly obsessive reviews and suggestions. Without Sara's help in the early chapters, I may have never finished what I have today. Sara, you inspired me to reach for the hights of my dreams, and gave me a medium to express myself without prejustice. For that, and many other reasons too numberious to name, I thank you.
You guys have been the best. I'll also take this time to thank all the Fanfiction writers who I have used as a base for my own writing style. There are so many, I cannot even name them all with my limited space.
All That Remains is over, but there are more things to be writen. The origin of Astaroc, the Battle that nearly destroyed the world, and the journey of the eight. This... is simply a preface... and after story that stirs the mind into thoughtfulness. A story.... To start other stories.
I hope all who read it find inspriration and confidence from the story I have written here. Never stop flying towards your dreams.
Pages: 69 Words: 17,957 Chapters: 14 Paragraphs: 1,052 Lines: 2,638 Reviews: 13; Rubberpiggy: 9, Jinx: 4
The End.....Or, perhaps.... The Beginning
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Full Pirate Monkey
Just beyond your imagination...
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Post by Jinxie<3 on May 3, 2005 15:38:28 GMT -5
The music is a fantastic touch, by the way ^_^
It ended beautifully, Dave.
Written well, kept my attention and the dialogue was fantastic. It gave the mind many things to think about.
You're more than welcome, but it was my pleasure to read what you've written. I couldn't have asked for a better fanfic.
All That Remains, you are kick ass. But Dave? You're even better.
-Jinxie<3
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Post by RubberPiggy on May 3, 2005 16:39:38 GMT -5
SHIT SHIT SHIT! I just wrote this whole long post and I lost the whole bloody thing! Dammit!!! I'll try to recreate it, but there was a lot more love and praise in the original, so keep that in mind...All That Remains, you are kick ass. But Dave? You're even better. I couldn't have said it better.
I KNEW IT! Who knew it? Sara did, that's who! Yo! I so knew it. I knew Astaroc could never be evil. It's just not who he is.
I loved the first scene leading up to the death of Risa. I didn't see that coming until I read her name, and then I had to go back and read the whole thing again, knowing that it was her. Very well done.
Then the next scene, that revealed that thing... you know, the one that I KNEW... that was so great. It was so funny and just so ATR. Ah, so much FLAMEing. Gotta love it. She even FLAMED her daddy, lol. It was just such a great scene, tho. Loved it.
The music was definitely a great idea. It didn't time out right for me, because apparently I read way too slow, but it still set the mood. Very nice.
After I read the end, I went back and read the prologue again. And then I read the epilogue again. I loved the "full circle" the story came in. I loved the difference in Astaroc from the first time he sat on that hill, and the defference in his meaning of the phrase "all that remains" from the beginning to the end. Yeah, of course, not all my questions have been answered, but that's why I'm eagerly awaiting what comes after... THE BEGINNING.
I was so happy to have your story to read, Dave. I had a genuine blast. I love the way you wrote it and I love the plot. It was just a really really great story. That statement in my sig won't be going away ANY time soon.
Oh, and by the way... I KNEW IT!. ;D
<3
~RP~
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Post by Winston on May 17, 2005 10:59:38 GMT -5
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA.
Ok Im only on Chapter 8 but damn this is awesome.
Hmmm.....Interesting. Who's Curse-Boy?
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Post by Winston on May 17, 2005 12:27:01 GMT -5
I just read the whole thing and that was fucking awesome.
Unfortunately I didnt get the ending timed properly, but still, superb.
From beginning to end I was fully enthralled. An amazing story, and I cant wait for more in the sequel!
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Post by CrazyDave on May 17, 2005 12:35:08 GMT -5
First off, you're curse boy.
Second THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!
hee hee hee.... To be honest, this is probably the best thing I've ever writen.
Getting reveues from you guys just make it better. Hee hee hee..... I love Astaroc!!!
Best character I've ever made!
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Post by Winston on May 17, 2005 12:37:18 GMT -5
I figured it was me, but I wasnt so sure.
BTW, Im hella fucking stronger than any of those E-bitches
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Post by CrazyDave on May 17, 2005 16:36:55 GMT -5
Actually, If we use the same system as we do now, most of the Elites would be around level twelve.
Three of the Elites reminded Astaroc of his friends, which is why he commented in such a way. #1 has speed and directecness like you (curse-boy). #3 was headstrong and skilled witha sword like Kitty-man(Mike). #4 had some low level ice magic, making her kinda like Demon-lady(sara).
so.... yeah, they'd all kick your ass right now. Fortunitly, in this story, Astaroc's well into the low teens-early twenties, so he can take them all out.
......mostly......
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