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Post by RubberPiggy on Jul 1, 2005 17:45:59 GMT -5
Thanks, Cait! 
Oh, did you think it sounded that bad? 'Cause I did it on purpose. I wanted to emphasize the way she was trying to figure out what to do 'now' and what was happening in the 'now.' and whatnot. It sounded right in my head. What do other people think?
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Post by RubberPiggy on Jul 5, 2005 16:19:59 GMT -5
Chapter Sixteen is up! Please leave feedback!
Pages: 40
Paragraphs: 610
Lines: 1815
Words: 13417
Chapter Seventeen coming soon!
~RP~
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Post by Winston on Jul 5, 2005 16:57:43 GMT -5
I kind of understand what youre saying, just doesnt sound right on paper I guess.
Just read the 2 latest chapters, and still up to par, its awesome! Lovin it. Keep it up.
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Post by RubberPiggy on Jul 5, 2005 17:38:51 GMT -5
Thanks, Winsto!
And I just went through and fixed everything through Chapter Fourteen, since all the formatting got messed up for some stupid reason when Proboards updated. It was nice, reading back over all my older chapters. I realized that I really liked a lot of it. So yay me, lol!
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on Jul 6, 2005 23:38:43 GMT -5
Word!
More good stuff, oh Sara of mine. In fact, I'd even say that I can't wait for more. (if I was druged up on sodium Pentathal, of course)
What does that mean? ..... I.... actually, I don't know.
Whatever, anyway. Your story continues to kick ass.
Ass, well kicked, is keeping your story fresh, funny, and highly entertaining!
Keep it up girl! I wanna know what happens next!
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Post by RubberPiggy on Jul 7, 2005 8:24:03 GMT -5
Thanks, Dave! <3 
OOoh! Was that thunder!? *looks out window* No, just those stupid guys who like to build houses in my back yard...
~RP~
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Post by RubberPiggy on Jul 11, 2005 20:28:55 GMT -5
Chapter Seventeen is out! It's long and good(hopefully) and stuff happens! Yay! Please read and please post feedback. Thankie!
Chapter Eighteen coming soon!
~RP~
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Post by CrazyDave on Jul 11, 2005 22:01:49 GMT -5
So that's the story, eh?
Welll.... not what I expected, I'll admit, but a very nice ending in the long run.
Still got the natural, All Sheely's Story flavor of texure and excitement going on Sara. Keep it a flowing.
and uh......... Masai, really? What the Hell is Masai?
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Post by RubberPiggy on Jul 11, 2005 22:14:41 GMT -5
That's not the end of the story, yo! Ieee... If I ever gave anyone the impression that this was a short story, I enthusiasticly apologize, because it is QUITE the opposite.
And earlier, back in the library, Giles was talking about the Masai ritual that the zookeeper had heard of, and back at the field trip when they first met the zookeeper, he mentioned talking to a Masai tribesman about the hyenas. Thus how Shelly was able to assume what the zookeeper was talking in, but that doesn't mean she knew. To be honest, I don't even know.
There wasn't really much in terms of plot in this chapter that came from me. So what I'm looking for in opinions this time is how it's written, since that WAS me. Thanks.
The next chapter is going to wrap up this episode, and then go into some original Shelly stuff that takes place during the next episode, but Shelly doesn't really see much of that. To think of my story in TV terms, which I almost always can't help but do, I think of Shelly as a recurring character in the first season, so we won't see as much of the actual episodes as we will later, until we get to the Season Two episodes. But by then, Shelly will have become such a bigger part of the group that even going from the BtVS episodes, it's still got its own differences and surprises.
Honestly, I think I write better when it's my own stuff than when I'm basing it around an episode, so I wouldn't expect to see me overdo that.
FUN!
~RP~
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Post by Winston on Jul 11, 2005 23:19:00 GMT -5
Good stuff. Thought the close up of the ep was a bit lame, but how can I expect much more from the show?  Still, good stuff. |
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Post by RubberPiggy on Aug 1, 2005 15:51:27 GMT -5
Tanks Winston for that last reply, and...
Chapter Eighteen is up! Please comment! Thanks!
~RP~
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Post by Winston on Aug 1, 2005 16:54:41 GMT -5
Awesome goodness.
/shifty eyes I suspect the teacher, of course, thats coming from someone whos never seen the episode, or much of the show.
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Post by RubberPiggy on Aug 1, 2005 17:02:37 GMT -5
Thanks, Winston!
This is actually before Miss Calendar was even introduced in the show, but she's one of my favoritest 'characters who should have become a regular.'
And as for your suspicions... I say nothing about no one...
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Post by CrazyDave on Aug 1, 2005 23:42:16 GMT -5
Well done, me lady!
Twas a successful romp into the world of Filler!
............anyway, It was good! I like it for (Reasons seen in other reviews). Sorry, I'd write them out, but I'm on a time crunch.....
....wait.... that teacher... doesn't she *DELETED* when *DELETED* Gets *ALL THIS STUFF IS ALSO DELETED*?
Well?
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Post by RubberPiggy on Aug 1, 2005 23:48:17 GMT -5
Yeah, she was ---------------------- because she was ----------------------, so then, after ------------------------------------ and -------, she -------------------------- for ----------, and then ------------------------------. Lol. Ah, if only I could write it here. But anyone could watch season two and learn all about that, hehheh...
Ha, but thanks, Dave. Lol, I actually do think I know what you were saying- at least I know if you were right about what you're saying. Heh, I'm gonna PM you now and see if I was right!
~RP~
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