Shadow Man discussion

[CrazyDave]

I've wanted to write something new for a while now, and this thing just came along.

It's not planed out. It has no plot, no purpose, no direction.

It's just the start, I guess......

Perhaps it will be something great.....

Warning: Shadow Man will be Dark.

David

[Winston]

New story from Dave!

/excited

[CrazyDave]

Chapter one is up.

Please give me some feedback... I've never writen a dark story before.

Thank you.

[Winston]

Its scary.

[CrazyDave]

Winston, let me explain something.

I'd like SOME DEPTH when you respond please. I already know It's scary, I WROTE the damn thing.

I wanna know how it effected you. Did you like it? Is it good enough to continue? got a problem with my writing style/spelling? Randomly wish to flame me?

That's all fine.

Its scary.

Not fine at all.

(sorry if this sounds harsh, but I'm depressed from writing that chapter.)

[Winston]

Dave

It SCARED ME

Thats how I FELT

Thats as deep as it went

I didnt go, "OH! THATS the meaning of life!!"

Get it?

[CrazyDave]

Ok, it's now seven hours after I wrote Shadow Man. Just for kicks, I re-read it, everything that I wrote last night.

........WHAT THE FUCK?

I don't get this! I... wow... I mean, after reading it, it made me want to SHOOT MYSELF!!!

GAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!

what the hell kinda mood was I in to write this story? And, I've got future chapters swiming around in my head. Great. Those will be fun.

I feel like I just ran over a puppy.... Am I that dark? I mean, I ususally only use one or two real fasits of my personality in my life (e.g. Crazy Dave) and generally ignore any other feelings altogether, if possible.

.......I think death is warm?.... god.....geese....

Dark nothing. This story is pitch black.

Also, I'd like to take a moment to apologies to Winston for a minute. You see, I was in a REALLY wierd place last night, which I guess made me pretty eritable.

That doesn't change my responce though. I know that there is a fanfiction writer out there who reseaves well over 200 reviews for each story chapter he writes. (I don't want something like that.... don't worry...) However, he/she is always complaining about one to three word reviews, and now that I've reseaved one, I know why.

I know you didn't mean it rudely, but my reaction to such a small, vague review is to think you read it half way, Got "Scared" (or something) stoped reading, went onto this board, and just posted for no damn good reason.

Now, don't get mad. I know you didn't do that. I'm just saying that's what a short post says to me. If someone doesn't have the balls to read my story, then they won't review here. Fine.

But trying to explain that to "Depressed Dave" is like driving a truck from New York to China. Fucking impossible.

huh........ well.... here's the real question I'm writing this right now. Should I keep writing this? If I do, expect alot more "Depressed Dave" comments. well? What do you think?

[Angels Sleeping]

"Depressed Dave" scares me.

But the story. . . Wow. . . It scared me. It made me think for the time I was reading it. At some points, I felt connected to the story. At others, I was all . . . "What the hell?" But it was still a good story.

I hope that was deep enough. . . I don't think I'm capable of really, really deep things at. . . 9:00 in the morning when I'm still half asleep.

Keep writing though! 'Tis awesome! Gives me chills.

[Winston]

My response wasnt a review Dave.

It was a response, a reaction.

If I write a review its going to have to be when I know what the hell is going on in the story.

[CrazyDave]

Well... then I guess you won't be reviewing for this story.

Every chapter is going to be just like that.

[CrazyDave]

GREAT........

Well, I now have two huge problems with this story:

1: Depressed Dave must write it, and he;s a wienie who NEVER comes out.

2: NOBODY WANTS TO READ IT!!!!

I was really hoping Ol' Jinxy would, 'cause she naturally writes that way anyway......

Meh... sooner or later....